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Tuesday, November 9, 2010

Enriched color... by the new rain; a second stanza added... call it what you will. A sedoka purist would suggest, 'it is not', thus, the space.


morning rains
to this wan brown leaf
new amber

blue jays
discuss this cold rain
each drop

13 comments:

Devika said...

"Give me some sunshine
Give me some rain
Give me another chance
I wanna grow up once again"

i am listening to a song -- it suited this haiku, i thought :)

good haiku, Magyar :)

wishes,
devika

Frank said...

Very nice haiku, Magyar...

Lorraine said...

I am charmed, wow Doug...

TALON said...

So evocative...the rain does stain the world, especially the leaves. Lovely, as always, D!

My word verification is "mistmen" - seems very fitting :)

sandy said...

A watercolored leaf! I like that one.

I am going to look that form, not being familiar with it, but I do know I like that second poem.

Magyar said...

Sandy, sedoka... linked ideas, two stanzas of three lines, 5-7-7 in structure. I really thank you for your interest!

Kim, Ah yes! The enhancement that rain can give; in its dank it can offer a special light. I truely Thank you. Always, one of the
'mistmen'.

I've charmed you LL?

And Frank... from you, someone that writes such remarkable haiku... I thank you.

Always growing
rain and sun,
with a chance to dance...
this tree.
__I heard you singing, Dear Dev!

John McDonald said...

nice pair M
john

Janice Thomson said...

I love the colour branches turn when wet. Such delightful images M!

Henrique Pimenta said...

Os detalhes tonitruam.

Gostei!

BB said...

How can one
Describe silence
with words ?
....................................

Frieda said...

I like the two stanzas very much.

Magyar said...

John, I do so appreciate your visits and comments!

Janice... the letter U in words such as coloUr... I think should be there!

BB... we think alike!

Henrique, I think you offered your thunderous applause... thanks!

Frida... I'm so happy to have your comments!

Thanks friends!! _M

Devika said...

:)

wishes,
devika