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Monday, September 12, 2011

Seasons end like sunsets; the Catbirds have flown. _m


days close
words that cross this silent pond
birds fly south

12 comments:

Bill said...

This reads like three separate items, a form generally avoided in haiku, which is generally structured around a central juxtaposition. Is that what you intend, or am I missing something?

Haiku don't always have to play by the rules.

Karol Rosiak said...
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Karol Rosiak said...

Good one, Magyar...

Best wishes,
Karol

Judie said...

I don't see these as three separate items. It made me think of the language of the birds calling to each other across the lake, bidding farewell as they begin to head south.

Lorraine said...

that time again...you write it so gently

Magyar said...

__With a smile, I'll punctuate.

Day's close words that cross this silent pond; birds fly south.

sandy said...

I love that second line!
yes fall is on the way.

Gillena Cox said...

this is such an interesting one; i read Bills comment and i see where he's coming from; but there's also another take, which more clearly exposes the fragment and phrase eg if we read
"days close and birds fly south
words that cross this silent pond"

much love...

John McDonald said...

well done M
john

Magyar said...

__Friends, I thank you all; your comments are fully understood, and respected! _m

my ship
sails before the storm
a following sea

Chèvrefeuille said...

This is a nice one. Such a lovely image.

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