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Thursday, October 6, 2016

__ I have discovered how nonacademic I have become, as I read  remarks about that that some people refer to as haiku. Now lets see:  1, no seasonal hints; 2, no nature; 3, humans involved in the verse but not as mere observers; 4, politics/religion in some...  and that all seems like senryu in my depleted and sour mind. Now, are haiku and senryu one and the same? Newspeak?
__ Inept, I cannot describe these below. _m

mountain side
as tree limbs blush
times path
*
cows follow
this hay-bale cart
times path

10 comments:

Jan said...

These seem like haiku to me, _m.
I will be the first to admit I had never heard of "haiku" until I visited your blog.
When I looked-up haiku in my dictionary it said;

"a Japanese poem or verse form, consisting of 17 syllables divided into 3 lines of 5, 7 and 5 syllables , often about nature or a season."

I do know this...I always enjoy reading what you write, _m. You make me think...sometimes more than I care to :}

Magyar said...

Thanks, Jan!
__ Haiku and senryu follow the same structure; yet the syllable count in our English language is so often less than the Japanese standard form of 5/7/5, and that seems to be broadly acceptable. Less is more, it has been said. I fully believe in the "thought separations" of haiku and senryu. Thanks again! _m

Bill said...

The word "senryu" has never taken hold in the US as "haiku" has. Of course, many of the American poems called "haiku" will be recognized by you and me as senryu. And, of course, as both forms evolve, some of our traditional definitions may not fit quite as tightly as they once did.

Mother Wintermoon said...

Lovely haiku! In western writing, I think the lines between haiku and senryu have blurred and that's okay with me. I like the blend. I just love the art of conveying a big picture in very few words.

Lorraine Renaud said...

Labels my Dear Doug, labels have no place in the beauty you share your words, visions, that i see in my heart, and I miss you so, so much...Stay well...I drop in when I can, but I'm too broke to do so at any regular time, I don't have a car anymore, the cost of everything is killing me, but every now and then I just have to come see you, see others who mean the world to me, then, now and forever. Stay well, until I return. xo to you and yours

baili said...

wishing you a healthy positive days head

Gwil W said...

Kerouac with haiku about the light in his fridge not working or something like that - that was good night for cherry blossom.

Crafty Green Poet said...

senryu and haiku are definitely becoming blurred these days, largely perhaps because many people spend less time in nature these days and don't notice the passing of the seasons so much as they used to

Magyar said...

__ Juliet, in recognition of your understanding comment I thank you for your visit and thoughts and. _m

Sandy said...

I have been off, waiting to be inspired. Should have come here to read what you had to say. Thank you!