I've scribbled but one haiku with the word, "butterfly," and since I've opted to use each fly's call name. The top is that one, and the lower was written just moments ago... imagination.
listen...
among the silent flowers
a butterfly
dandelions
float on a new wind
this monarch
- Magyar
- Cape Cod, United States
- __I see with young eyes, an old mirror. Here, I hope to offer... as I see.
12 comments:
i loved both, Magyar
the first one a bit more...more serene :)
wishes,
devika
I really like that first one, magyar. What does Keats say about unheard music?
I think both compel you to study the movement of the butterfly - but experience that movement in different ways. Quite wonderful.
yes, wonderful!
both poems are good, I though like the first one best.
Two excellent poems...
I have but one butterfly poem to my name; I need not wait for the insects to stir for inspiration;
we have yours!
exquisite, Magyar. both gems.
Wasn't it a butterfly's flap which changed the weather here? Thanks for that: It is springtime now!
Best wishes
Ralf
They are both lovely; the technique is somewhat of the sedoka where the second verse emphasises the first
much love
gillena
These are just exquisitely written
Magyar.
Agree with these comments too!
I think I have something like this somewhere in Finnish:
In a forest path
a butterly
passing me
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