__We... had so counted on the old skills and crafts that had built this world, and yet today from so many corners, those arts of providing life... have been re-labeled as lowly functions.
__I ask you my friends to visit -Bicando- that link to the right... and I, back to the sands and the beach... with slight changes.
this sea
we placed in sands
footfalls that traced our path
as tides rose to erase each step
we are
- Magyar
- Cape Cod, United States
- __I see with young eyes, an old mirror. Here, I hope to offer... as I see.
15 comments:
nice cinquain; like the waves washing onto the sand, i think we too recreate ourselves from time to time
much love ...
Sea is the source and perhaps the most effective metaphor of life, i always thought...cinquain as a form has not held my interest, don't know why....but form was not important as much as fuction....a good one, Magyar :)
as regards the content, it reminded me of our Poet Laureate's words:
"Not hammer-strokes, but dance of the water, sings the pebbles into perfection." ~Rabindranath Tagore
wishes
devika
Thanks Dev,
_Few people identify with Cinquain,
that I use it, may be the wee bit of 'Howard Roark' I have within me.
_Gillena... sometimes we need to recreate each time we awake... and I thank you... -the tide's recreation-
_m
Short... Crisp...Superb!
yes waves sing to me you always do
I almost feel the breeze on my face!
Beautiful, as usually:)
Very nice poem, Magyar...
I like the idea of this. Sometimes, we need a new beginning.
enjoyed it too M
john
This is so bittersweet, D - our lives are just like grains of sand...
And, yes, the old ways are not honored and celebrated as they should be...which is very sad.
__Pranavam... crisp is a great complement... thanks!
__Dear friends, LL, Joo, Sandy, and K!
_soft songs
_for ever heard
_this breeze gives beginnings
_to melody's bittersweet grains
_stay sung
__John and Frank... I'm so glade you like my scribblings!
_m
... and BB, my humble attempt.
I read this differently: as footsteps that followed ours in the sands of time and while the tide erased them both we still are...
Janice... thank you for your perception; I toyed with the word
-our-... and thought -they-, and perhaps 'twould have been a better and more meaningful line. ;<) _m
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