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Monday, November 2, 2009

Looking for the wind.

thoughts linger
among these fallen leaves
a wren

16 comments:

Devika said...

Nice, Magyar :)

Looking for the wind -- wrong time, i'm afraid :)

wishes,
devika

Magyar said...

___As a wren turns the leaves... but one at a time... I look for the wind to stir my thoughts. ___Thanks for the kind comment, Dev.
_m

Devika said...

ha! sounds a windmill of sorts :)

kidding Magyar -- the first thought was that its waves i often associate with that process of stirring thoughts...but then, wind is the primemover there too :)

its always my pleasure to read Magyar :)

wishes,
devika

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

"fallen leaves" I like that.

Kristin Riggs said...

Love this, Magyar!

John McDonald said...

lovely one M
john

nora said...

Stunning, Magyar. I really love it.

Lorraine said...

I love all wind, and this is precious my friend ;)

Dalloway said...

excellent juxtaposition

BlueJayEye said...

very enriching thought for imagination Magyar, enjoyed it.

RBroeker said...

The German word for wren is Zaunkönig (king of the fence). This opens the scene even wider to me, _m. Like it!

Best wishes
Ralf

Gillena Cox said...

enjoyed the surprise element of the wren among the fallen leaves

much love
gillena

Rudi Pfaller said...

I like the technique:
It's what we call in German "Scharnierzeile". The second line is linked with the first line and with the third line as well.

thoughts linger
among these fallen leaves
>That is a complete meaning!

among these fallen leaves
a wren
>That's a complete meaning as well!
Well constructed!
Best wishes
Rudi

ABQ Annie said...

Yes nicely done, I loved all the recent haiku that you've written. Everyone's comments so educational for new poets like myself, too.

Ashi said...

I like these thoughts among the leaves - and yes autumn gives many thoughts to linger with, noty only for a wren ;)

Bill said...

Very nicely turned.