Enriched color... by the new rain; a second stanza added... call it what you will. A sedoka purist would suggest, 'it is not', thus, the space.
morning rains
to this wan brown leaf
new amber
blue jays
discuss this cold rain
each drop
- Magyar
- Cape Cod, United States
- __I see with young eyes, an old mirror. Here, I hope to offer... as I see.
13 comments:
"Give me some sunshine
Give me some rain
Give me another chance
I wanna grow up once again"
i am listening to a song -- it suited this haiku, i thought :)
good haiku, Magyar :)
wishes,
devika
Very nice haiku, Magyar...
I am charmed, wow Doug...
So evocative...the rain does stain the world, especially the leaves. Lovely, as always, D!
My word verification is "mistmen" - seems very fitting :)
A watercolored leaf! I like that one.
I am going to look that form, not being familiar with it, but I do know I like that second poem.
Sandy, sedoka... linked ideas, two stanzas of three lines, 5-7-7 in structure. I really thank you for your interest!
Kim, Ah yes! The enhancement that rain can give; in its dank it can offer a special light. I truely Thank you. Always, one of the
'mistmen'.
I've charmed you LL?
And Frank... from you, someone that writes such remarkable haiku... I thank you.
Always growing
rain and sun,
with a chance to dance...
this tree.
__I heard you singing, Dear Dev!
nice pair M
john
I love the colour branches turn when wet. Such delightful images M!
Os detalhes tonitruam.
Gostei!
How can one
Describe silence
with words ?
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I like the two stanzas very much.
John, I do so appreciate your visits and comments!
Janice... the letter U in words such as coloUr... I think should be there!
BB... we think alike!
Henrique, I think you offered your thunderous applause... thanks!
Frida... I'm so happy to have your comments!
Thanks friends!! _M
:)
wishes,
devika
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