With the time change, our sunrise is an hour early; the morning's first seam of this new day.
early sunrise
above the tree limb stitches
this days hem
- Magyar
- Cape Cod, United States
- __I see with young eyes, an old mirror. Here, I hope to offer... as I see.
7 comments:
nice one M
john
Very elegant and I can see it, I like that about you :)
Very sensual. Like it.
Yes, very nice. I like the way you put an edge on the day.
I like the use of methapor!
I want to show you this haiku of our great German haikuist Gerd Börner. He had a similar feeling. Interesting - isn't it?
heaven and earth
summer rain
hemming the day
http://athenaeum-language.blogspot.com/2007/06/haiku-in-germanenglish-from-whc-german.html
I think you should write:
this day's hem (with apostrophe?)
Best wishes
Rudi
__Thank you... John, and Lorraine, and welcome Lola. (Yup... I got it right that time.) Sandy? The edge of the day, lovit!
__Rudi, thank you for the presentation of the Borner haiku and links, interesting indeed. I only use (rightly or wrongly) in haiku/senryu, an occasional ellipsis, no punctuation.
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